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       Most of us seem to be a little too preoccupied with what’s down the road, to the point where we miss what’s right under our feet. We’ve got the idea in our heads that some other day will be somehow better than the day we’ve got now, and that today’s just a stepping stone to that day. There is some truth to that idea, better days will come, but there is no fault in today that could justify throwing it away.

           The future is a silly place to live; no man has ever seen it, and no man ever will. The path under our feet is the only path we have; what’s around the bend will be ours in its own time, but by then we’ll be looking on to the next bend. Plans and dreams will never be wholly fulfilled, so a man who lives on them will die wanting.

           The day we have now is a blessing. It is the day our grandfathers prayed for in the trenches, the day our fathers fought for in the jungle, and the day our brothers are dreaming of right now in the desert. They all wished for a cool fall afternoon, a pretty girl, a peaceful waterfall. They envisioned the things we have now.

           Are we so far gone that we can’t appreciate what we’ve got? Do we have to keep looking around that next bend, or can we slow down and see what we’ve got around us right here?

           I don’t know who first had the idea that a bird in the hand is worth two in the bush, but I think he must have had the wrong idea. Is a bird really worth more because you’ve caught it? A free bird is worth far more than a captured one.

           A good life does no lie in grand investments for the future, or in how man birds a man has in his hand or how many stars he’s chased. It’s the answer to this question: are you glad to have lived today? In the end, if you have lived a stream of good days, you will look back and see a good life behind you, and that is the most any man could ask for.
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wow, just read this again and I don't hate it...

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Please don't use "naught". It makes you sound pretentious or from the eighteen hundreds. A better way of putting things would be: "Nothing" instead of the words "There is not". Remember economy of words is crutial, ie the fewer the better.

Try to use "to be" words sparingly. There's usually a stronger way to say things.

Maybe i'm dense, but i'm not sure what you're getting at. Things seem a little unfocused to me...

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hmm, that's refreshing... somebody who doesn't say "thats nice", you're growing on me... does wonders for my ego, but it gives me something to do with the rest of my night...

naught. archaic, true, the effects of reading too much archaic writing. just be glad I didn't use "fain" at all, it's my new favorite word, I would fain use it every other sentence.

I'm thinking of taking out the entire first two paragraphs and retooling the last one, beat it to death with the economy of words.

what I'm getting at is that nobody really realizes how close they are to being dead. think of any near-death experience, how happy were you to be alive after that happened? life and death are that close together, one cut, one shot, one bad turn, pick your poison, mortality is right there, and that should not be forgotten.

thank you for the honesty, finally got what I needed from someone...
I want to see you say it more like this: "what I'm getting at is that nobody really realizes how close they are to being dead. think of any near-death experience, how happy were you to be alive after that happened? life and death are that close together, one cut, one shot, one bad turn, pick your poison, mortality is right there, and that should not be forgotten."
when you write, you don't have to act like some psuedo-intellectual (unless this is for school). Just be yourself, be concise, and let the words flow (then go back and edit, of course)

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"I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish

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I guess I walked right into that one.... another ten or twenty minutes and I'll have the edited (chopped down, concise, and readable) version up...

and that was the flow. my speech is incredibly short and simple, my writing, when I have my way, is incredibly long and crazy to everyone but me, but I need (some help) to find that happy medium...
try saying things as you write them. that should help.

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The Summer "Tell Me a Story" Contest

"I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish

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true, that.

are you planning on being a teacher? I love my english teacher to death, but you're doing her job way better than she ever did
actually, i am. English or History. I am going for professor, but i've heard that having a PhD and teaching high school will get me more money.

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The Summer "Tell Me a Story" Contest

"I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish

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you'll do well with that. that was an excellent set/smash on the "say what you mean and mean what you say" thing, you've definitely got a knack for it
Thanks. Let's hope i still do in seven years or so when i actually have to use it! That and getting published. Tricky business.

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The Summer "Tell Me a Story" Contest

"I'd rather have a powerful poem full of technical flaws than an insignificant poem that was flawless." --*Mahi-Fish

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yeah, burnout is a bitch... you think people like me are bad, imagine trying to get this kind of lesson across to someone who doesn't care at all, or just wants to impress you for a grade. not an easy job, but anyway.

hows this? definitely still room for improvement, but it's progress

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